I have been a nurse for twenty years. In that time, I have seen a great number of patients suffer because they did not have heal
th insurance. One of the worst cases was a young mother of two who was diagnosed with early stage skin cancer. Because she could not afford treatment, the cancer spread from her skin to other parts of her body. By the time I saw her for the first time, the cancer had reached her brain and she could no longer be helped. This sort of thing should not happen to anyone. A strong universal health care system could prevent instances like this from occurring. Which of the following additions would make the paragraph more objective and effective?
the use of facts and statistics to support the anecdote
the use of more subjective words like “worst” and “best”
the use of another anecdote about a patient
the use of more figurative language when relating the anecdote
the use of facts and statistics to support the anecdote
Explanation:
Objective writing is writing that can be verified through <em>evidence and facts</em>. Therefore, to make the paragraph more objective and effective, you need to add some facts and statistics. Objectivity means being as close to the truth as possible, so subjective words or figurative language will hardly help with that. Another anecdote about a patient can probably make the paragraph more entertaining, but entertaining does not mean objective. The use of verifiable facts and statistics will serve as a much more efficient tool if we need to add objectivity to our piece of writing.
