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I love going to the zoo with my dad. Many of the animals are cool and we like looking at animals especially lions. <u>because</u> (lions are big and strong and strong animals are scary) (Change : They are tough and ferocious, which makes them scary)<u> </u><u>in real life</u> but when they are in a cage it isn't so bad. <u>but</u> I would never want to be put in a cage because I would get sad. <u>so</u> (I don't know if the animals are happy or sad but) (change : Uncertain if the animals will feel happy or sad themselves) my dad (says)(change : said) that the animals at the zoo are very well taken care of and i shouldn't worry about them.
Explanation:
I added brackets to the parts where i changed the sentenced, underlined the parts I would cross out and bold the periods.
Where it says change : don't add that in the sentence.
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I can "knock the walls down" in my life by setting up my own buisness. Due to me being young and having to go through lots of work to get where want to be, I still do not have my smll buisness. What I can do is be determinated and have full faith that i can do this. It would also be nice to have support from others. I understand that there are reasons why I cannot do it, but im never going to give up. I hope to inspire others to do the same.
Explanation:
sadly i have lost the idea of putting up a small but i have realized that even with all the hard work, I dont want this. Remeber to think about what u want and not what others think of it. listen to what YOU want.
hope his helped! :)
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Changing the sentence from a very long sentence into a short and choppy helps the suspense by not giving the reader a lot of information and making them really think and wonder.
For example:
"The stranger watched, a look in his eyes and this feeling spread throughout my body."
or
"There was a man watching, his blue eyes had this look in them that made me shiver with fear. His pale face held no emotion and made him seem as if he was just a corpse standing on his own."
The second one might sound better, yes, but the second one really makes you think and really builds the suspense.
"Who is this stranger? What does he look like? What feeling spread throughout their body?"
So instead of knowing a lot about this stranger, you know little to nothing and it really makes you want to know more, and definitely build the suspense.
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the messenger's remark, “I looked toward Birnam, and anon, methought, / The wood began to move"
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