Question

Is this a good structured essay

Answer 1

Answer:

I would say no.

Explanation:

There are multiple grammatical errors in this essay and overall it just needs some refinement. The sentences are a little short and there is no evidence to support the claim.

Good luck! Hope this helps!

Answer 2

Some of the grammar is incorrect, some parts don’t really make a lot of sense. you have to read some parts multiple times to understand and i think the vocabulary could be more advanced depending on what grade you’re in, but besides that good job